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Basilius
Here is your review!! :) I hope you find it useful and fun.
Clan Page
First, I love your layout. It is clean and clear, interesting without being cluttered. The horizontal lines work well to break it into different sections. Your notes to self are small and unobtrusive at the end (and I laughed at your Quote, lol. Math is THE WORST).
Second, wow, I love the idea of Reform Sorneithism (although that's quite a mouthful) and Sornieth Hatch Signs. That really helps explain how dragons can have different elemental allegiances! Great find, and it's great those ideas are welcome to be shared. I 100% am going to have a new role of "preacher" in my lair now :)
Lastly, lore-wise, you do a great job of laying out the three different Clans your lair holds! I can already tell that Hermes, Adam, and Fresco will each have their own clusters of dragons, and I'm wondering what Adam did to lose his Clan. Also, I'm trying to imagine him walking if he weighs as much as a freighter, which he would if he was really made of gold. BOOM, BOOM, BOOM! Does he have an attendant sorcerer that uses magic to make him lighter?(P.S. the little elemental flag at the type of each section is cute as well)
Lair Impressions
Fun dragons! That's my first thought. I see some bright, fun colors and Marva's eyes, and a sweater of shame. I also see it balanced out by some darker dragons - every lair in Sorneith needs protectors, after all! I see some pure-white souls, and then your Gen 1 projects, which I can already tell have fabulous colors.
Diversity-wise, you have eleven breeds on your first page, which is awesome! It looks like all you are missing is a bogsneak. Evenly mixed by gender, as well, and no one breed seems to dominate. I do notice that you typically have only one gender of each breed, which is interesting (female skydancers, male snappers, female imperials).. although that bias would only become really obvious if your lair tripled in size. We all have favorites, and I'm always struggling to keep myself from having 160 female skydancers (but wouldn't that be a sight?)
You've obviously paid attention to your dragon's apparel. Some of your dragons have quite expensive regalia (Adam, Postal) and every dragon on your main lair page has a few pieces. I feel a bit let down when I flip to page 2 and see a lot of pretty, bare dragons! In particular, Chaplin and Chantau are both gorgeous and I can't wait to see them dressed up. Kudos, though, for not biting off more than you can chew. It does make everything seem more organized to have more completed dragons together and then work-in-progress dragons separately.
Lore and Bios
I was hoping to learn more about your clans reading your dragon's bios, but sadly, there's not much more information than was present on your Lair Paige. There are so many unanswered questions - probably trapped inside your head, just hoping to bust out! Why did Adam lose his Clan? What has Fresco done to deserve other dragons following him (I'm quite unsure about that one, he doesn't look very trustworthy to me, carnivals are scary!)?
I quite like your bio formats. They are simple and clean, informative and easy to read, and visually pleasing. They also contain humor, which made each of your bios a real pleasure to read. I like that you have a consistent format throughout, and that you have a simple place to start that ties all your dragons together (The Deities lists).
The only thing I don't love about them is that the title of each is "Hermes Clan" or "Fresco's Clan" or "Adam's Clan". It takes away the importance of each individual dragon and makes them a subsidiary of their leader. Perhaps you could have their name in place of their affiliation, and then put their affiliation in smaller font the next line down? You could also add a color for each Clan that might make it more cohesive and easy to tell who is part of which Clan as you flip through. For example, "Hermes Clan" could be written in dark green, "Fresco's Clan" in Blue, and Adam's Clan in dark gold? Or something like that. Or maybe a border? Hmm.
One other thing I would like to see in your bios is what the role each dragon has in your clan - a few of them have it but others don't. For example, Trinket, Stout, and Daleth. It would really add to their lore :)
Specific Dragons
I know Postel doesn't have lore yet, but she's so gorgeous I had to talk about her. She couldn't be more perfect for that apparel set. Fire butterfly is so incredible, and the solar flame set is really nice on coatls - you can have the entire set on and she doesn't look buried.
Trinket is really cute! The silvers and greys and purples go really well together, she's colorful without being bright or obnoxious. I love the steampunk set and I think it is underutilized. I'm getting a mechanic or engineer vibe from her.
Stout looks like a plague dragon, but I see she is arcane. I'm surprised the Plaguemother isn't one of her deities! she is very well dressed and looks like a mercenary or assassin or executioner.
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JEEZ I just got that. Imperial Stout. Sigh.
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Anyway, I love her color combination.. coral bar kinda looks like rotting flesh, particularly when paired with the cleaver and the browns.
Aaron is really cool looking, but I can't hep but feel like he's a little unbalanced. He's got such pretty pastels.. his apparel and the arcane apparel and the silks - but then much darker colors as well (the plague symbol and dark blue apparel). He also has a LOT of stuff swirling around him. It actually all kinda works but I think he could look a little more ... warrior-like. I would probably remove the field tools and winter wind and add something else darker on his wings- the filigree wing guards perhaps?
Letter is another dragon whose apparel colors I don't feel really compliment her. Reds and pinks just don't work for me. I think she would look better with gold apparel, perhaps with an arcane tome or keep the field tools. Plus we can't see that beautiful spinner! Or with that ice belly, perhaps gossamer silks? Or maybe dark purples? (Ok, ok, I admit it, I'm a pinkist)
Bloof is really cool. She Does see to embody autumn with her golds and oranges. I think her bio should say "she is like a fireplace", not "she is alike a fireplace".
Shoutouts to Vulture and Six, who are both gorgeous.
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