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ChaliceCabriel I see, I'll take a look then! c: And yes, money after is just fine. =)
I apologize in advance for the length of this post. 8D;
First, I like the idea behind the banner with the broken-down squares, but I feel like it would look better if the boxes were larger on the left side of the main portion of the banner, and going smaller to the left, so it looks like the banner is breaking down. I also would add a top and bottom border, as it looks odd that there is no border there when all the mini-boxes are fully bordered. I recommend non-italicizing the banner text--it looks more professional and clean, imo. I'd also remove the credit to yourself (again, this clutters up the banner a bit) and instead integrate it in one of your posts in a format something like this: "All graphics are by ChaliceCabriel".
An edited version of your intro (my commentary on the changes I made in brackets):
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Welcome to the Touch of the Storm [capped]Hatchery, here you're welcome to take home your very own piece of the storm! Here we breed for varying ranges of all sorts and I'm[capped] constantly adding and changing[typo] things so be sure to check back often! Peruse as you like;[added semi-colon] we might bite but it's all in good fun,[added comma] I swear! Don't be afraid to contact us for any reason and each dragon's[added apostrophe] code is included so you can check out future offspring with more ease.
I may agree to stud out any of my dragons for a stud or dam fee or nest split, I also look for other nests to breed my dragons in sometimes.
And of the updates section:
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-[removed to one dash, to be consistent] I have changed the look again!!! XD
- I now exalt dragons[??? more detail please--I have no idea if you mean you just exalt dragons willy-nilly, or you exalt hatchlings that don't sell, or unpopular pairs and whatnot] and[uncapped, this is not a new sentence] the pinglist [pinglist does not need to be capped]has been re-added.
- [added a space]May no longer be regularly breeding some pairs[which pairs?? specificity would be nice] so if interested in anything in particular be sure to ask.
I think the headers are really nice but give the hatchery's theme I think it'd be more appropriate for them to be storm-themed. ^^
How We Work section--it looks weird to me that the dash is underlined as well--I think it'd be better if just the words were underlined. Although I think bold + underline is kinda overkill anyways, just bold alone would work just fine imo.
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Hatchlings will be priced upon hatching as the market tends to vary often but I am open to all kinds of haggling and alternate payments in the form of apparel, unhatched eggs, and certain swipp items.
A suggestion for the above--maybe go through an item list and pick out items you'd accept as payment and list their image codes under this section so people know exactly what you're looking for?
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RATIO - Gem to Treasure ratio 1:350
Rather than name this bit Ratio, I'd call it Gems and say "I accept gems at a rate of 1:350".
Put the Ping bit first! Don't want people missing that part. :P
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I do not carry ping lists over between nests [reworded] for specific reasons[this is a super vague non-reason, either remove this phrase or actually explain what those reasons are] so if you would like to indefinitely stay on a certain list just let me know.[divided this into two sentences since it was getting lengthy] If you change your mind and would like to be removed after all [missing a clause here?? you're missing the tail end of the if-then statement], otherwise after each ping I will ask if you would like to remain on and all non-answers will be perceived [spelling]as no and also upon transaction unless asked otherwise.
For sale section--I recommend putting the description in this format so it's easier to read:
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Blue Speckle/Ice Shimmer/Banana Gembond
Male
55kT [either use 55kt or 55,000t--55,000kt is in the millions+ or something I believe]
5375416
From the Arctic Winters Collection
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Looking for 30k separately or[changed "and" to "or", since you can't do both options x)] around 50k for both.
I really like the formatting of your pairs! It's very neat, clean and visually easy to read & understand. I do notice though that your borders aren't actually going over the dragons at the edges--is this intentional? It looks neat in the middle where their heads come together, but it looks a bit messy at the other edges--especially in pairs like Frosted Dreams where you're missing an entire edge.
Also, it would be nice if the links you provide are in the same order that they are in the graphic. Like if in the graphic the male is on the left, then the link to him is also on the left.
It's too late now for this particular board, but in the future it'd be nice to have the affiliates & pinglists in a separate post. ^^