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Hi! I'm writing lore for my pfp dragon - Rhian, and I think the lore actually has potential to become a full-blown story :'D [url=https://www1.flightrising.com/dragon/70907965][img]https://www1.flightrising.com/rendern/350/709080/70907965_350.png[/img][/url] So I'm asking if people would be interested in reading a story related to the blurb I currently have in his bio. [s]Reviews are very much coveted PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE CONSIDER GIVING SOME [/s] [quote name= "Pinglist...wow ',~',"]@LegendaryManpig @Espei @SugarPlum214[/quote]
Hi! I'm writing lore for my pfp dragon - Rhian, and I think the lore actually has potential to become a full-blown story :'D

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So I'm asking if people would be interested in reading a story related to the blurb I currently have in his bio. Reviews are very much coveted PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE CONSIDER GIVING SOME
Pinglist...wow ',~', wrote:
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camilo/rai | they/it | FR+ 15

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camilo/rai | they/it | FR+ 15

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Oh, seems pretty interesting! I'm really interested in seeing what'd happen next honestly! I will say that it's hard to understand what the bold is specifically? Is it them having visions? Others perspectives? I'm assuming the former, since that's more what it felt like, but it's not 100% clear! The grammar is mostly good, and I can't think of anything in particular to critique there? Maybe removing all-caps words, and doing italics instead? It feels more professional that way, but it's really a matter of preference tbh! Additionally, is this set in Sornieh? Or maybe in a different, but similar world? I feel this should also be specified! Overall though, I'd say it's a really good start, and I'd really love to see more!
Oh, seems pretty interesting! I'm really interested in seeing what'd happen next honestly! I will say that it's hard to understand what the bold is specifically? Is it them having visions? Others perspectives? I'm assuming the former, since that's more what it felt like, but it's not 100% clear! The grammar is mostly good, and I can't think of anything in particular to critique there? Maybe removing all-caps words, and doing italics instead? It feels more professional that way, but it's really a matter of preference tbh! Additionally, is this set in Sornieh? Or maybe in a different, but similar world? I feel this should also be specified! Overall though, I'd say it's a really good start, and I'd really love to see more!
[quote name="LegendaryManpig" date="2021-08-23 02:04:41" ] Oh, seems pretty interesting! I'm really interested in seeing what'd happen next honestly! I will say that it's hard to understand what the bold is specifically? [b]Is it them having visions? Others perspectives? I'm assuming the former, since that's more what it felt like, but it's not 100% clear![/b] The grammar is mostly good, and I can't think of anything in particular to critique there? Maybe removing all-caps words, and doing italics instead? It feels more professional that way, but it's really a matter of preference tbh! Additionally, is this set in Sornieh? Or maybe in a different, but similar world? I feel this should also be specified! Overall though, I'd say it's a really good start, and I'd really love to see more! [/quote] You are correct! They ARE visions, though Rhian just doesn't know it yet - he thinks those are just random flashes of memories. [quote name="LegendaryManpig" date="2021-08-23 02:04:41" ] Maybe removing all-caps words, and doing italics instead? It feels more professional that way, but it's really a matter of preference tbh! [/quote] Italics [s]make me feel like I can do anything and it's just me being an idiot[/s] might not fit well in this situation, maybe. It's because I'm writing from a child's point of view, but your advice is quite sound! I'll consider making his thought processes/the way he looks at the world more mature as he grows up, though. [quote name="LegendaryManpig" date="2021-08-23 02:04:41" ] Additionally, is this set in Sornieh? Or maybe in a different, but similar world? I feel this should also be specified! Overall though, I'd say it's a really good start, and I'd really love to see more! [/quote] It's in a continent far away from Sornieth. 'Summerbrook, the land of the eternal sun' - My old clan description, and now it's evolved into this mess of a giant continent with only ~70 dragons XD Thanks for the compliments, anyways ^~^ A warning, though: This story pretty much DOESN'T comply with FR canon lore, besides the part where the deities exist and [s]the dragons/creatures of Summerbrook hate their guts.[/s] And the dragon breeds. It's called fanfiction and not original story because of this sole reason, lol! Edit: @LegendaryManpig
LegendaryManpig wrote on 2021-08-23 02:04:41:
Oh, seems pretty interesting! I'm really interested in seeing what'd happen next honestly! I will say that it's hard to understand what the bold is specifically? Is it them having visions? Others perspectives? I'm assuming the former, since that's more what it felt like, but it's not 100% clear! The grammar is mostly good, and I can't think of anything in particular to critique there? Maybe removing all-caps words, and doing italics instead? It feels more professional that way, but it's really a matter of preference tbh! Additionally, is this set in Sornieh? Or maybe in a different, but similar world? I feel this should also be specified! Overall though, I'd say it's a really good start, and I'd really love to see more!
You are correct! They ARE visions, though Rhian just doesn't know it yet - he thinks those are just random flashes of memories.
LegendaryManpig wrote on 2021-08-23 02:04:41:
Maybe removing all-caps words, and doing italics instead? It feels more professional that way, but it's really a matter of preference tbh!

Italics make me feel like I can do anything and it's just me being an idiot might not fit well in this situation, maybe. It's because I'm writing from a child's point of view, but your advice is quite sound! I'll consider making his thought processes/the way he looks at the world more mature as he grows up, though.
LegendaryManpig wrote on 2021-08-23 02:04:41:
Additionally, is this set in Sornieh? Or maybe in a different, but similar world? I feel this should also be specified! Overall though, I'd say it's a really good start, and I'd really love to see more!
It's in a continent far away from Sornieth. 'Summerbrook, the land of the eternal sun' - My old clan description, and now it's evolved into this mess of a giant continent with only ~70 dragons XD

Thanks for the compliments, anyways ^~^

A warning, though: This story pretty much DOESN'T comply with FR canon lore, besides the part where the deities exist and the dragons/creatures of Summerbrook hate their guts. And the dragon breeds.

It's called fanfiction and not original story because of this sole reason, lol!

Edit: @LegendaryManpig
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camilo/rai | they/it | FR+ 15

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Random facts about the protagonist, Rhian

1. Ze/zem pronouns
2. Zey are a seer but he doesn't know it yet
3. 'Seeing' in the sense of having visions doesn't mean that ze can look into the future at any given moment
4. Ze's cynical and calculating. Ze will never do anything without something given in return.
Random facts about the protagonist, Rhian

1. Ze/zem pronouns
2. Zey are a seer but he doesn't know it yet
3. 'Seeing' in the sense of having visions doesn't mean that ze can look into the future at any given moment
4. Ze's cynical and calculating. Ze will never do anything without something given in return.
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camilo/rai | they/it | FR+ 15

closed | wishlist | lair | res | res

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camilo/rai | they/it | FR+ 15

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Im liking the story so far, cannot wait to see more of it. Pinglist please! ^^
Im liking the story so far, cannot wait to see more of it. Pinglist please! ^^
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Oh, is there a pinglist? If there is, add me too! :D
Oh, is there a pinglist? If there is, add me too! :D
yippee! no one has decided that this post is worth interest besides two friends :D
yippee! no one has decided that this post is worth interest besides two friends :D
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camilo/rai | they/it | FR+ 15

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Hi to you, @TacoTequila!

Hmm...any tips would be welcome, lol.


Good night/day!
Hi to you, @TacoTequila!

Hmm...any tips would be welcome, lol.


Good night/day!
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camilo/rai | they/it | FR+ 15

closed | wishlist | lair | res | res

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