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I have been away on hiatus for a little while now, and I have edited and FINISHED a lore dragon!
Meet Majesty:
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All that is left to do is make a final outfit for her!
Critique on her lore is greatly appreciated! I am always looking for ways to improve my writing!
I have been away on hiatus for a little while now, and I have edited and FINISHED a lore dragon!
Meet Majesty:
All that is left to do is make a final outfit for her!
Critique on her lore is greatly appreciated! I am always looking for ways to improve my writing!
Want to buy some pretty dragons, FOR CHEAP!?
Her lore is wonderful! *chef kiss* :D If you want a bit of help making it even better, though, here are a couple of tiny grammar fixes:
He was truly afraid of what his citizens would think of his daughters strange gift.
*daughter's
Original section:
"What would father think if he found out that I killed a woman?" She thought. So she flew away, stubborn enough to believe that her absence would ease her fathers mind. As she flew tears of gold streamed down her cheeks.
Edited section:
"What would Father think if he found out that I killed a woman?" she thought. So she flew away, stubborn enough to believe that her absence would ease her father's mind. As she flew, tears of gold streamed down her cheeks.
Original section:
Apparently she had flown strait into the Tide Lords domain. Of course Majesty was from the Shadow flight, so she attempted to fly free [. . .]
Edited section:
Apparently, she had flown straight into the Tide Lord's domain. Of course, Majesty was from the Shadow flight, so she attempted to fly free [. . .]
That's all I'll write, because I don't want to be annoying. :')
Her lore is wonderful! *chef kiss* :D If you want a bit of help making it even better, though, here are a couple of tiny grammar fixes:
He was truly afraid of what his citizens would think of his daughters strange gift.
*daughter's
Original section:
"What would father think if he found out that I killed a woman?" She thought. So she flew away, stubborn enough to believe that her absence would ease her fathers mind. As she flew tears of gold streamed down her cheeks.
Edited section:
"What would Father think if he found out that I killed a woman?" she thought. So she flew away, stubborn enough to believe that her absence would ease her father's mind. As she flew, tears of gold streamed down her cheeks.
Original section:
Apparently she had flown strait into the Tide Lords domain. Of course Majesty was from the Shadow flight, so she attempted to fly free [. . .]
Edited section:
Apparently, she had flown straight into the Tide Lord's domain. Of course, Majesty was from the Shadow flight, so she attempted to fly free [. . .]
That's all I'll write, because I don't want to be annoying. :')
I made this signature just for the achievement.
I'm so glad! :D A lot of people are pretty sensitive about criticism. x)
(btw I edit my original comment, putting the corrected parts in bold so they're easier to spot.)
I'm so glad! :D A lot of people are pretty sensitive about criticism. x)
(btw I edit my original comment, putting the corrected parts in bold so they're easier to spot.)
I made this signature just for the achievement.
