@Irony
Oh, no worries about me. I’m good with the pace I have. Thank you.
Hm, maybe a little repetitive, but that is not exactly a bad thing. I had made comments about the fun of an unreliable narrator in another review and I think Beatrice would make a hilarious unreliable narrator for her own lore. I suggest changing the point of view into first person, where Beatrice can be introducing herself to Adriana or another dragon. Honestly, I would suggest Adriana. It is a good opportunity to show off just how childish and awkward Beatrice can be. You have a lot of potential to make a fun and light-hearted piece of lore.
Overall I would say keep up the good work. It is an interesting concept to get into the mind of a simple beast that was suddenly magicked into a dragon. All of that brainpower and perception would be quite dizzying.
Oh, no worries about me. I’m good with the pace I have. Thank you.
Hm, maybe a little repetitive, but that is not exactly a bad thing. I had made comments about the fun of an unreliable narrator in another review and I think Beatrice would make a hilarious unreliable narrator for her own lore. I suggest changing the point of view into first person, where Beatrice can be introducing herself to Adriana or another dragon. Honestly, I would suggest Adriana. It is a good opportunity to show off just how childish and awkward Beatrice can be. You have a lot of potential to make a fun and light-hearted piece of lore.
Overall I would say keep up the good work. It is an interesting concept to get into the mind of a simple beast that was suddenly magicked into a dragon. All of that brainpower and perception would be quite dizzying.
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