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Elsewhere Thank you! It was a bit of a pain to organize all those fields of responsibility, honestly, especially with the overlapping ones. Then I just decided "What the heck" and decided some dragons had two day jobs.
Your lair looks familiar; I'm pretty sure I've poked around here before. xD I like the stat bars you've got on the right. Janja's story is great, and I love how you explained her appearance in the story. It actually has some bearing instead of just being a description of her. (I especially like that bit about Janja having been bred to be delicate "for aesthetics".)
The hierarchy at the bottom is nicely organized, too. It couldn't have been easy to get the columns centered like that, but it looks very neat and is easy to read.
BONUS: My Sheol greets your Sheol, yo~ You will find that her bio is not as...um, impressive, however. ^^'
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Athexreh That's some nice organization there! I especially like the rambling style, but had to skip some parts of Trammel's bio because the corrupted text doesn't show up on my browser.
I still have figured out how to fix that. D: Pretty fun idea to include the reader as part of the lab staff, btw. It's an interesting way to frame the introductions of the other characters.
Revellen and Desolan had some truly stunning stories. I like how we get a short introduction of Revellen, and the descriptions of the heavenly bodies at the end sort of throw everything off, make the reader question if Revellen really is
just a dragon.
Desolan, too -- poor guy. I can really get that sense of him scrabbling at the world, trying to figure out what's missing...only for him to start doubting it when whatever it was that he wanted (or not?) comes along.