Can somebody give me lore feedback? | Creative Corner

So I just had a crack at writing my first lore, for the first five dragons in my lair -- Berloiz to Daybreak, all in their bios. A nice chronological row of dragons, setting the foundation for my clan's story. [url=http://flightrising.com/main.php?dragon=7287375] [img]http://flightrising.com/rendern/350/72874/7287375_350.png[/img] [/url] [url=http://flightrising.com/main.php?dragon=35430143] [img]http://flightrising.com/rendern/350/354302/35430143_350.png[/img] [/url] [url=http://flightrising.com/main.php?dragon=35561499] [img]http://flightrising.com/rendern/350/355615/35561499_350.png[/img] [/url] [url=http://flightrising.com/main.php?dragon=34493735] [img]http://flightrising.com/rendern/350/344938/34493735_350.png[/img] [/url] [url=http://flightrising.com/main.php?dragon=34310736] [img]http://flightrising.com/rendern/350/343108/34310736_350.png[/img] [/url] Reactions and feedback are greatly appreciated. The two areas I see most room for improvement in are coding/formatting (which I'll figure out some other time once I've had a break) and writing about the world of Sornieth. If anybody has tips on these aspects on lore creation, I would greatly appreciate them. As far as what I have, please enjoy!

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October 07, 2017 19:15:49

So I just had a crack at writing my first lore, for the first five dragons in my lair -- Berloiz to Daybreak, all in their bios. A nice chronological row of dragons, setting the foundation for my clan's story.

Reactions and feedback are greatly appreciated. The two areas I see most room for improvement in are coding/formatting (which I'll figure out some other time once I've had a break) and writing about the world of Sornieth. If anybody has tips on these aspects on lore creation, I would greatly appreciate them. As far as what I have, please enjoy!