Ok, so reading the
Nocturne Encyclopedia page, I've noticed a few mistakes. Although I've noticed that others found these as well, some of these are from a few years ago, so I'll repost:
Problem: word choice (incubation)
Quote:
These bat-like dragons are stout and make use of an impressive wingspan to wrap themselves during the day, incubating their bodies.
According to Google, incubate either means to hatch eggs or develop an infectious disease - I'm not too sure that the nocturnes are attempting to do either in this context.
(Please correct me if I'm wrong, this might be a metaphor or something)
Solution: Did you possibly mean
insulating?
Problem: extra s (adapts and mimics)
Quote:
Nocturnes are a species that adapts and mimics dragons they are in close proximity with...
Self-explanatory (I hope) - adapt and mimic both have an s afterwards.
Solution/Possible Sentences:
- Nocturnes are a species that
adapt and mimic dragons they are in close proximity with...
-
The Nocturne species adapts and mimics dragons they are in close proximity with...
Problem: wrong article & another extra s (games)
Quote:
Their personalities and behaviors are passed from one individual to the next in an lengthy communal games of copycat.
Not only should the an be an a (an --> a), but there is an extra s here as well.
Solution/Possible Sentences:
One option is to remove the s and change the an...
fix-1 wrote:
"Their personalities and behaviors are passed from one individual to the next in a lengthy communal game of copycat."
...or to remove the an altogether.
fix-2 wrote:
"Their personalities and behaviors are passed from one individual to the next in lengthy communal games of copycat."
Hope this was easy enough to read & understand...